For example, some areas I improved in were breaking writing into small paragraphs, condensing long sentences, and placing a clear thesis in an appropriate place. All of the above is inherent in the characteristics of a persuasive essay. Although it seems clear and simple, the ability to do it correctly will only come with practice. In the compare and contrast essay “Gaining Knowledge or Earning Money”, the original contained long paragraphs with too much detail. Therefore, the revised version has shorter paragraphs separated by topics. Thesis work involves directly expressing the author's opinion, supporting body paragraphs, and responding to the prompt if there is one. However, in the sports culture class essay “In Favor of Sportsmen,” my thesis did not respond to the prompt and did not represent what I was trying to write about. After revision, I changed it from "However, athletes grow up in a special environment that helps them better prepare for real life and succeed" to "However, there are some aspects in which athletes lead which represent them from the positive side, for example communication skills, a successful approach to work and lasting pressure in a stressful situation The changes I made clarified my idea on this topic and gave an idea of ​​​​what will be. covered in the essay Although revision is a never-ending process, I improved the structure of my essay and created more sentences.